If it prints OK, then it has to be a problem with your monitor. Have you ever tried to calibrate it?
You could simply turn the brightness of your screen down quite significantly and then you would be forced to make your images appear brighter on your monitor. But that is, by no means, a substitute for the proper calibration. Then, you will need to calibrate (or re-calibrate) your printer as well. As a rule, always calibrate your monitor first and then fix the printing issue, if there is one.
Anyway, I think this is one fine image. I wonder, how the hell you were able to record anything (on film, I presume) with this many filters on your lens, but the result of your experiment looks very interesting. You've captured the mystery and mood very well.
BTW, personally, if I have a specific effect in mind, I start with a normally taken shot and then I mash, punch and torture it in Photoshop. In my mind, it works just as well as experiments at the shooting stage, but is easier to accomplish, with no fun lost along the way.
P.S. Nowadays, the calibrating equipment became quite affordable (
ColorMunki,
Spyder 3,
iOne, etc.), but you still need to invest some time in learning how to use it properly and first tries could be sometimes disappointing. But it is very well worth your while.
There is a lot of reviews and tutorials on the web. You can start with the links I post below and then work your way vertically or horizontally, so to speak.
[ The
ImagingResource is a very good site and it provides free newsletter, which I always enjoy reading. ]
